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Subject:Re: Some Help With Re-phrasing From:Kathleen Kuvinka <kkuvinka -at- CLIENTELE -dot- COM> Date:Thu, 22 Oct 1998 09:13:07 -0700
How about something like:
While in the Summary window, double-click any entry to display a new Job
View window for the job.
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Deborah Cooper [mailto:dcooper -at- INSTEPMOBILE -dot- COM]
> Sent: Thursday, October 22, 1998 6:33 AM
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> Subject: Some Help With Re-phrasing
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>
> Hi,
>
> I'm having a problem with correct wording. I'm trying to convert
> a passive-voice document to active voice. Here's the phrase I'm
> having trouble with:
>
> While the Summary window is displayed, you can double-click
> any entry shown in the Summary window. This action causes
> the system to display a new Job View window for this job.
>
> Its actually (I think) the second sentence that is causing the
> problem. The document consists of many such sentences and
> I'm at a loss as to what to do.
>
> Thanks in advance for the advice!
>
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