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Help. Which construction is better? Is the first sentence conditional?
1. ALERT: Look for visible meat fibers when inspecting rawhide chews and dog
toys,. Sniff
the product to find out if it has a strong odor. If you detect either meat
fibers or a strong odor,
the rawhide product is not enterable.
2. ALERT: When inspecting rawhide chews and dog toys, look for visible meat
fibers. Sniff
the product to find out if it has a strong odor. If you detect either meat
fibers or a strong odor,
the rawhide product is not enterable.
This is a controversy in our manual's section. And, we want to get it right.
It's for a manual
agricultural officers use to protect our country's livestock from foreign
pathogens.
Thanks,
a342jpatters -at- attmail -dot- com
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I'd use smell instead of sniff. See the dictionary.
Are there invisible meat fibers? I'd delete visible.
enterable is not a real word - is it?
I'd use #2 modified as: ALERT: When you inspect rawhide . . . . .
Bob Morrisette
writer -at- sabu -dot- EBay -dot- Sun -dot- COM
