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Charles -- "When" wouldn't work at all, because you need a pronoun here that
refers to those who sat down (and who are now lying dead) on the beach.
This poem is sort of a long-winded way of saying "He who hesitates is lost."
Why do you think "when" has a place here?
--JS
>Here's one for all of you English "Experts". With the following poem:
>"On the beach of indecision
>lay the bleached bones of thousands
>Who with victory in sight
>Sat down to think about it"
>On the third line should the first word be Who or should it be When?
