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Subject:screen voltage From:mpriestley -at- VNET -dot- IBM -dot- COM Date:Thu, 3 Feb 1994 13:28:24 EST
Len Olszewski writes:
>John P. Eldard wants to replace a word:
>> What would you use in the following example to replace "indicated"?
>>
>> Measure voltage at test point indicated on computer screen.
>Eliminate it.
>"Measure voltage using the test point on the computer screen."
>No charge.
Hm - call me paranoid, but I have an image of the user doggedly poking the
voltmeter at the screen in a futile attempt to comply.
Come to think of it, a really bloody-minded user could choose to interpret
the first sentence that way too, but I still think there is a semantic
difference worth preserving between "shown on the screen" and "on the screen".
I have no objection to eliding in principle, but concision shouldn't be
achieved at the price of clarity (though like I said, perhaps I'm just
being paranoid).
Michael Priestley
mpriestley -at- vnet -dot- ibm -dot- com
Information Developer
IBM Canada
Disclaimer: Me not IBM.
