Re: Yet one more - really need an explanation for this one

[Deborah Hemstreet <dvora -at- tech-challenged -dot- com>]

The problem with both statements is that they are incorrect now...

Anyways, the draft already has gone out.

Deborah

Pro TechWriter wrote:
> There are a couple of problems as others have said. The first one is 
> verb tense agreement. The second problem is (I think, unless XX 
> Systems is the company name) is that the true doer of the action is 
> implied. 
>
> Two options:
>
>    1. Informal - "We develop XX Systems based on over 10 years of
>       research." 
>    2. Formal  - "CompanyName develops XX System products based on over
>       10 years of research."
>
>
> Both are also stronger statements. 
>
> Good luck!
> PT
>
> On Wed, May 20, 2009 at 11:05 AM, Deborah Hemstreet 
> <dvora -at- tech-challenged -dot- com <mailto:dvora -at- tech-challenged -dot- com>> wrote:
>
>      Hi All,
>
>     I have a sentence that reads:
>
>     XX Systems were developed based on over 10 years of research ...
>
>     The client wants:
>
>     XX Systems *are *developed based on over 10 years of research ...
>
>     I am certain that "are" is incorrect here, but don't know how to
>     explain
>     this. Can you help?
>
>     Thanks
>
>     Deborah
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