RE: Grammar (again!)

["Ed" <hamonwry12 -at- hotmail -dot- com>]

My .02:

We licensed six of our technologies to other companies, which are currently
in various stages of development.

I think it clarifies things a bit, and also turns to active voice. However,
I'm confused if the technologies are being developed by your company, or the
companies to which they're licensed.

-=Ed.

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> Hi All,
> 
> When writing text for a brochure, which do you believe reads more
> smoothly:
> 
> 1. We have licensed out six technologies that are in various stages of
> development...
> 
> 2.  We have licensed out six technologies in various stages of
> development...
> 
> Could you explain WHY you believe 1 or 2 is better than the other? I
> don't want to give my opnion, as I want as objective a response as
> possible.
> 
> Thanks!
> 
> Deborah
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