Re: Grammer question

[Janice Gelb <Janice -dot- Gelb -at- Sun -dot- COM>]

Leonard C. Porrello wrote:
> Thank you for your incisive comments. You're absolutely right. The
> entire "Requirements" section is absolutely necessary to understand the
> sentence, and no explication, none whatsoever, is possible apart from
> the requirements section in its entirety. In fact, for a truly complete
> understanding, you'll probably need the entire 500 page guide. I'll be
> sure to include it next time I ask a grammatical question.
> 

Bonnie's message might have been a bit more informal
than she intended but her point is still valid: the
sentence could be improved by indicating what type
of requirements you're talking about, or where they
can be found. As for your main question, here's my
take on clearing up the modifier confusion of your
original text:

"You can run ingest jobs from any computer connected
to your network that meets requirements."

-- Janice

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> 
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Bonnie Granat [mailto:bgranat -at- granatedit -dot- com] 
> Sent: Thursday, August 28, 2008 12:34 PM
> To: Leonard C. Porrello; techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com
> Subject: RE: Grammer question
> 
>  
> 
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: Leonard C. Porrello
>>
>> I can't decide which of the following two expressions is preferable:
>>
>> A. You can run ingest jobs from any computer that meets 
>> requirements in
>> your network.
>>
>> Vs.
>>
>> B. You can run ingest jobs from any computer in your network 
>> that meets
>> requirements.
>>
>> The requirements mentioned pertain to the computer, not the network.
>>
>>  
> 
> The computer has requirements? What kind of computer has "requirements"
> other than that it has an operating system? Requirements for *what*?
> That a
> sentient being be using it? That it be plugged into a power source?
> Neither
> statement's meaning clear to me. Nor is your sentence explaining whose
> requirements you're talking about. Now maybe I'm just too non-techie to
> get
> it, but I am perplexed about what you might even be referring to.
> 
> 
> Bonnie Granat
> http://www.GranatEdit.com
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