RE: Repeat the verb?

Subject: RE: Repeat the verb?
From: "Michael West" <mbwest -at- bigpond -dot- com>
To: <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Wed, 23 Apr 2008 21:25:45 +1000

Lauren wrote:

> I would want to write the sentence as follows.
>
> The bank should have clear standards for the collection and modification
of
> all elements and the standards should combine these elements in a manner
> that most effectively enables it to quantify its exposure to operational
> risk.
>
> - or -
>
> The bank should have clear standards for the collection and modification
of
> all elements that combine these elements in a manner that most effectively
> enables it to quantify its exposure to operational risk.


But the original sentence does not say that the _standards_ should combine
elements; it says the _bank_ should combine elements.

Nancy submitted the following sentence:

> > ---The bank should have clear standards for the collection
> > and modification of all elements, and should combine these
> > elements in a manner that most effectively enables it to
> > quantify its exposure to operational risk.

I see no justification for changing the subject of the verb from "bank" to
"standards".

I do wonder, however, if the author of the sentence intended the following
but wasn't syntactically capable:

"The bank should have clear standards for collecting and modifying all
elements, and for combining these elements in a manner that" etc. etc.

Hard to tell what the poor sod intended.

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