Re. Wording without he/she?

Subject: Re. Wording without he/she?
From: "Hart, Geoff" <Geoff-H -at- MTL -dot- FERIC -dot- CA>
To: "Techwr-L (E-mail)" <TECHWR-L -at- lists -dot- raycomm -dot- com>
Date: Thu, 24 Feb 2000 14:46:41 -0500

Sue Deichmann wondered how to reword the following sentence while
eliminating pronouns as much as possible: <<The subscriber you have selected
cannot be removed because he/she has dependent mailboxes. Please remove
these mailboxes before removing the subscriber.>>

Start by expressing what the reader is trying to achieve, then explaining
how to achieve this: "To remove this subscriber, you must first remove all
dependent mailboxes."

--Geoff Hart, Pointe-Claire, Quebec
geoff-h -at- mtl -dot- feric -dot- ca
"The paperless office will arrive when the paperless toilet
arrives."--Matthew Stevens




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