Re: display/appear

Subject: Re: display/appear
From: Mark Wilden <Mark -at- MWILDEN -dot- COM>
Date: Sun, 28 Sep 1997 19:06:36 -0700

> Emma Heftman writes:
>
> Should it be:
> "The line of information that is displayed at the top of the screen
> refers to..

Passive voice, to be avoided unless active voice is awkward.

> or
> " The Device Identity screen displays a line of information at the top
> of the
> screen, which refers..."

Redundant and wordy.

> or
> "The line of information that appears ..."

Best.

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