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The interrupting
>phrase is an embedded clause, so it's condensed from a more basic form--
>possibly "when they had victory in sight." Obviously such a clause would
>disrupt the smooth unmetered flow, so the author chose to embed this
>information in a form that would still make sense grammatically.
Not only that, but you'd still need the "who," so you'd have: "Who, when
they had victory in sight..." Blech. Right? "With" takes care of the
phrase "when they had" very neatly. ...JS
The poem:
>"On the beach of indecision
>lay the bleached bones of thousands
>Who with victory in sight
>Sat down to think about it"
