RE: If user manuals were written in steampunk

["McLauchlan, Kevin" <Kevin -dot- McLauchlan -at- safenet-inc -dot- com>]

Of course, if I were to don my technical editor's hat, 
I'd need to stroke a few regrettably-red lines through 
some of that text. 

For example, it would be "... in the amount of 'X' Amperes, 
at a pressure* of 110 Volts."  (*or potential if you prefer)

Also, can an effect be seen and described while remaining 
undiscovered? Surely it is the cause, and not the effect, 
that remains to be unearthed.

I think the terminating sentence might profit from division 
into two, or at least the introduction of a more forceful 
punctuation than its first comma - don't you agree? 

Additional transgressions are left to other discerning readers 
to denounce, or not, at your discretion. Nevertheless, if 
those are the worst faults to be found, one might still 
profit hugely from a visit to such an edifying site. 

Boy, set up my samovar, won't you? And bring the tea chest. 
There's a fine lad. Nothing like a little "roughing it" to 
raise the mood, wot? 



> -----Original Message-----
> From: Chris Morton
> Subject: OT: If user manuals were written in steampunk
> 
> *The illumination of my brass lamp faltering at times, your humble
> servant
> had a lovely encounter with this fascinating descriptoid in the
> noontime of
> the day past...*
> 
> If you visit the Google library in these days, the librarian will find
> plenty of articles and depictions of so called "Steampunk Monitors". In
> my
> imagination though, I envisioned the creation of a device that could
> show
> static but also moving pictures generated by means of computation and
> modulation of waves generated by my ingenious new invention.... (Any
> resemblance to devices used in "City of Lost Children" is purely
> coincidental).
> 
> I also wanted to add "loudspeakers" (E. Siemens, et al.) to the device
> to
> present an even more pleasurable experience.
> 
> The device will be able to reproduce sound and static/moving pictures
> and
> will be powered by another invention of mine, based on the works of my
> fellow researchers Nikola Tesla, using hyper-condensed steam applied to
> a
> turbine by the same name, Count Alessandro Giuseppe Antonio Anastasio
> Volta
> and Michail Osipovich Dolivo-Dobrovolsky, able to produce alternating
> current in the amount of 110 volts.
> 
> The glass storing containers and part of this generator will be visible
> atop
> the base cabinet. Due to an yet undiscovered effect, these jars light
> up in
> the rhythm of the reproduced sound. (Not depicted in this
> Instructable.)
> 
> Please bear with me, your humble servant will keep you updated on the
> progress of this Instructable, for you to enjoy and, if you feel
> inclined,
> to reproduce.
> 
> *Excerpted from
> http://www.instructables.com/id/Miss-Betsys-Steampunk-Monitor-1/*
> 

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