RE: Is there a better way to word this?

["Combs, Richard" <richard -dot- combs -at- Polycom -dot- com>]

Borowik, Kristy wrote: 
 
> I really hate it when manuals say something like: "Click the x link,
and
> you will be returned to the x page." It's the "and you will be
returned to"
> part that bothers me, or when people say "Click this link and you will
be
> taken to (whatever)." Is there a better way to say that? After all,
the
> users never leave their seats! :)
> 
> I was thinking maybe something like: "The x page reappears." Any other
> suggestions?

"To return to the x page, click the x link." Better yet, just "click x"
unless x by itself is ambiguous in this context and you need to
explicitly specify "the ... link." 

But returning to the x page may not be the real goal. In that case,
something like, "To framboozle the x-pods, click x. The x page appears.
Select a framboozle level..." 

There's really no need to use "reappears" instead of "appears" (and
displays/redisplays is just plain wrong, as Suzette Leeming pointed
out). 

Richard
 

Richard G. Combs
Senior Technical Writer
Polycom, Inc.
richardDOTcombs AT polycomDOTcom
303-223-5111
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303-777-0436
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